need an advice and criticism

[mdavidct]

Hi Mister C.B. Cebulski,

i did this comic and need some advice of my work and some criticism what i need to do to be better, things i do good and things i do wrong i going to post the cover and 3 pages and the link whit the 11 page comic. hope can check it.

and hoper people that read this boards can comment to, i apreciate that.

sorry for my bad english in advance.






this is the complete comic http://www.mdavidct.com/killthat2/



and another mini comic of 4 pages and also is a character study

http://www.mdavidct.com/spacesearcher/

[csmithart]

Hey mdavidct,

Saw you posted on my thread at the Millarworld forums, thought I'd return the favor.

I think your stuff is pretty good. I like your storytelling choices, especially on the first page. I really like the money shot of the alien at the top of page 2. I think the third page could benefit from some different size figures prom panel to panel. Panel 2 and panel 5 are too similar with the figure sizes. Also, in panel 6 it took me a minute to realize that it was the back of the guys head on the right side.

I love the mixing of sci-fi and western genres as well. Great idea.

Your color choices are great for the subject matter- it has a nice washed out watercolor look.

Just checked out your other 4 pager. I love the Kirby-inspired character design. Very cool stuff.

[antlion]

Very nice stuff! Can't really think of any criticisms. I can only say "do more!

[Arion]

The coloring effects on the cover are wonderful.
I really like your work, sure there are some things that could be improved, but that are minor details .

[IDIOTHEAD]

I like the coloring effects and the figure work is certainly stylized. I would like to see more in the backgrounds though. All seem blank except for the establishing shots on page one. And the buildings in the background on page one, I felt could be more detailed. Like make people look like they live there. People walking around or wagons, other horses, barells, etc. You've got all meat and hardly any potatoes for us. Expand a bit and I think that would do well!

Cheers, T

[mdavidct]

Hey mdavidct,

Saw you posted on my thread at the Millarworld forums, thought I'd return the favor.

I think your stuff is pretty good. I like your storytelling choices, especially on the first page. I really like the money shot of the alien at the top of page 2. I think the third page could benefit from some different size figures prom panel to panel. Panel 2 and panel 5 are too similar with the figure sizes. Also, in panel 6 it took me a minute to realize that it was the back of the guys head on the right side.

I love the mixing of sci-fi and western genres as well. Great idea.

Your color choices are great for the subject matter- it has a nice washed out watercolor look.

Just checked out your other 4 pager. I love the Kirby-inspired character design. Very cool stuff.

Thank you so much for the tips, im doing more pages and hope these one are better and i take note and i use them in my new samples.

and i colored in watter color because i was a litte slow in the computer, so i going to upload new ones colored in the CPU.

Very nice stuff! Can't really think of any criticisms. I can only say "do more!

thanks and sure i going to do more.

The coloring effects on the cover are wonderful.
I really like your work, sure there are some things that could be improved, but that are minor details .

thanks, i going to put more in the details.

I like the coloring effects and the figure work is certainly stylized. I would like to see more in the backgrounds though. All seem blank except for the establishing shots on page one. And the buildings in the background on page one, I felt could be more detailed. Like make people look like they live there. People walking around or wagons, other horses, barells, etc. You've got all meat and hardly any potatoes for us. Expand a bit and I think that would do well!

Cheers, T

thanks, and great you point me that my first try's i like to do comics and focus in story and do a finish pice but practice, but like you said need more backgrounds, and that the one that see the comic know were the character are.

Thanks to all and sorry take me so long to put a reply, but for 3 days i sear my post and never be uploaded so i forgot, but i going to upload more here.

this is a 4 page comic i do but is more like a character study, and try to do both things character study a comic and a color exercise. i did in the end of 2009





http://i2.photobucket.com/albums/y26...eSearcher4.jpg

this is a one page story i did this 2010 pencil inks and color.







and these are some layout pages of spidermar i star doing so any comment could be great. to fix my mistakes.

[eriklundy]

I really like the texture and design of things.

[GeorgeZapata]

Looks really good. The one problem I'm having though is figuring out exactly where everyone is. You establish the area nicely in the first page but the next pages are a bit tougher. We're not sure where the other 2 riders come from nor where the monster throws that one guy in the last page where all the zombies pop out from. One good rule of thumb is it to have a decent establishing shot in every page(or atleast most) to make sure the reader knows exactly where everyone is at all times.

The designs, coloring and lettering came out real nice

[shinlyle]

I think your setting could be a little more defined, but I'm honestly too blown away by the coloring and the color rendering to give a fair, impartial critique! The colors and overall look are awesome, man!!!

[mdavidct]

thank you all, for the comments i going to take note and apply your tips and do better draws and coloring.

and here a new page is a short story so a lot happend in 2 pages this is page one hope soon upload the finish ones.