what do you guys think so far of this cover?

[batmanbooyah]

the main character and the crowd below him are still being worked on, but what do you think so far?


http://www.hervatski.com/pictures/coverbeta.jpg





here are a couple finished (sans ink) pages. any thoughts?


http://www.hervatski.com/e/page8.jpg


http://www.hervatski.com/e/page9.jpg

[RED!]

i like it really good actually!

[THWIP!]

The background on the cover is nicely done. I like it.

[Patton]

I dig it man. a lot actually.

what's the plot skinny?

[batmanbooyah]

plot skinny i'm keeping to myself for the time being, but the main character's a villain. its a dark comedy. not raunchy, but i promise lots of explosions! the kids love the explosions.

[Nick_Ardill]

Great Background perspective. I myself hate doing backgrounds like that. Friggin hate drawing buildings. Much rather focus on people. Maybe I'll be like Pat Lee and hire people to do my backgrounds, produce a bunch of crappy books, then I can run my business into the ground.

[innocentboy]

not bad at all.

but just my personal taste leans more to exaggerated proportions rather than really technical pieces

God bless,
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[batmanbooyah]

Great Background perspective. I myself hate doing backgrounds like that. Friggin hate drawing buildings. Much rather focus on people. Maybe I'll be like Pat Lee and hire people to do my backgrounds, produce a bunch of crappy books, then I can run my business into the ground.



he fades back, he puts up the shot he ZINGS!

[RED!]

i'd read it!

[batmanbooyah]

not bad at all.

but just my personal taste leans more to exaggerated proportions rather than really technical pieces




:p serious? you sure? just kidding :D

[CapnChaos]

Fuck, that's a lot of windows!

[Brewtown Andy]

Why is this sports?

[Caley Tibbittz]

That looks really nice -- the figures on page one need more work, but overall, it's really good. :)

[batmanbooyah]

yeah, its not a finished page yet, it's in the midst of being done.


i put sports cause i put sports for every thread i create.

[stevapalooza]

The buildings are great. But the foreshortening on the floating guy looks a little wonky.

[The Roman Candle]

If the guy on the cover is supposed to be somewhat midgetly, then it's awesome.

[JABSEN]

I like the perspective.but cn he be a little higher


And he does look a wee bit liitle person-y

[batmanbooyah]

yeah the characters are still being drawn.



now just to get alex ross to paint that cover and we're so in!

[moonspider]

wow...likes em

[Race]

Wow, those windows must've taken forever!

I like the cover, but one thing: Your foreshortening on the main character feels off. His feet should be bigger with his lower legs no longer than they are. Otherwise, he just comes across as really short.

Other than that, I think it looks really good. How long did it take?

[batmanbooyah]

Wow, those windows must've taken forever!

I like the cover, but one thing: Your foreshortening on the main character feels off. His feet should be bigger with his lower legs no longer than they are. Otherwise, he just comes across as really short.

Other than that, I think it looks really good. How long did it take?


i don't know exactly. the artist has been juggling his job as well as lots of things that have been popping up. now if i can just get a hold of the inker who disappeared on me, we can get rolling!

[DaGetHighKnight]

The perspective on Page 1 is great. Love all the windows too.

[jugglersdespair]

Hello everyone. I'm the one responsible for these pages. Thank you for the feedback and critiques. I'm probably just going to give the cover another try. A totally fresh start. I'll try to keep everything in mind for the new page and hopefully it'll turn out ridiculously awesome. But I'd be happy with above average.

Thanks again.

[BriRedfern]

Looks good.

[joeAR]

I like it. I like it a lot.

[Mister Mets]

The buildings on the cover look great.

The main character on the cover looks really really old. Good reactions by the crowd.

[mario]

backgrounds are good.
The foreground people not so. Overall the design of the drawing that's supposed to be the cover is kinda static and tame. It needs more drama.

[TonyFleecs]

The buildings are great. But the foreshortening on the floating guy looks a little wonky.
That's what I was going to say. It looks like you're using the same perspective on him that you are the buildings... Maybe try pushing it further. Think Kirby.

[batmanbooyah]

That's what I was going to say. It looks like you're using the same perspective on him that you are the buildings... Maybe try pushing it further. Think Kirby.


i one time thought "what would Jesus do?" so i punched a guy. turns out i need to read up on Jesus.

[Woomba]

It could be phenomenal with this bg, but the main figure needs fixing.
Let me know if you want me to try to help you.