I'm making a zombie movie, and here's my teaser trailer.....

[YC Comics!]

Here: http://www.pipelinernd.com/

Or a youtube: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=UJVdLtk9w8Y

comments and critiques welcome.

[Uther]

I liked it.
Granted I watched it without sound so I can't comment on that.
But it was well-crafted and competantly put together especially considering your means. And it looks like you've got some kick ass action go on too.
My one suggestion is that the titles you used seemed very iMovie and really lowered the tone for me. Some of them were awkwardly framed and phrased. And, to me, the "ghoulish" font seemed kind of tack. And fading in and out got really tiring. Also, two sentances in one title is cluttered and unneeded. Don't be afriad to hard cut. But apart from that one small thing I really, really liked it and look forward to the whole thing.

Good work man, keep it up!

[Simps]

The sound needs a lot of work.

[YC Comics!]

I liked it.
Granted I watched it without sound so I can't comment on that.
But it was well-crafted and competantly put together especially considering your means. And it looks like you've got some kick ass action go on too.
My one suggestion is that the titles you used seemed very iMovie and really lowered the tone for me. Some of them were awkwardly framed and phrased. And, to me, the "ghoulish" font seemed kind of tack. And fading in and out got really tiring. Also, two sentances in one title is cluttered and unneeded. Don't be afriad to hard cut. But apart from that one small thing I really, really liked it and look forward to the whole thing.

Good work man, keep it up!

Thanks for the suggestions. I'll definitely take those into account :)


The sound needs a lot of work.

That issue is something we're still trying to figure out how to tackle. Being a high school student doesn't allow us a lot of room for any budget at all, and we know that bad sound can make your movie appear even more amateur than it already does.

So any suggestions on sound editing or better techniques are welcomed!

[YC Comics!]

really?

No More comments from anyone?

[BCD]

This is just my own personal taste, I'm not telling you what you should or shouldn't do, just my reaction:

I hate the title cards. Not that there's anything wrong with them specifically, I just hate title cards always. Show the movie, not the blurb for a print ad. The advantage of a trailer / commercial is that you get to see the actual product, so don't waste time showing anything else.

You should be able to make it very clear through clips that the guy wakes up in a school filled with zombies, it's not necessary to hammer that home with text. The less you say and the more you show the better.

The footage itself looked fine, the title cards are at a lower level of quality and hurt the overall impression of the film. Just seeing the footage I think that looks good for an amateur film, and don't take amateur as an insult think of the literal definition.

The sound could definitely use some work though to make it crisper. I'd say use either music or the actual sound, both doesn't seem to be working. The music sounds clear, but it's drowning out the sound.

[YC Comics!]

This is just my own personal taste, I'm not telling you what you should or shouldn't do, just my reaction:

I hate the title cards. Not that there's anything wrong with them specifically, I just hate title cards always. Show the movie, not the blurb for a print ad. The advantage of a trailer / commercial is that you get to see the actual product, so don't waste time showing anything else.

You should be able to make it very clear through clips that the guy wakes up in a school filled with zombies, it's not necessary to hammer that home with text. The less you say and the more you show the better.

The footage itself looked fine, the title cards are at a lower level of quality and hurt the overall impression of the film. Just seeing the footage I think that looks good for an amateur film, and don't take amateur as an insult think of the literal definition.

The sound could definitely use some work though to make it crisper. I'd say use either music or the actual sound, both doesn't seem to be working. The music sounds clear, but it's drowning out the sound.

Sweet. I think I'll go back and get rid of most of the title cards. I think you're right with the music too.

I guess I was just scared of peopel seeing it and being confused about what it was, but I guess that's kind of dumb now that I think about it. It's pretty obvious with the title and all.

thanks for the help!

[YC Comics!]

Here is a revised (http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=Sgg-vQlWkco) version.

I didn't take all of your suggestions, but I did take some, and I think it made the product much beter. thanks for the help!

[Capt. Canada]

Cool! I always dig a zombie flick.